What is the relevance of ‘Patient stratification post pharmacy in your context and within the change?

Remember that this organisational development (OD) project will have an organisational impact and contribute to improvements in your service . This work cannot be described as research (pg 8).
I advise you to follow the suggested headings for this chapter
1 Introduction
1.2 Organisational Context
1.3 Rationale (include here the Importance of the change and the expected outcomes pg 7.)
1.4 Aim & Objectives
1.4.1 Aim
1.4.2 Objectives
1.5 Role of the Student in the Organisation and Project
1.6 Summary and Conclusion
Page 6: Your aim statement is too long: remove the elements that describe education, policy and procedures to leave a statement that says what you are implementing and why. (introduce electronic prescribing across the whole? hospital to enhance patients safety and quality of care.) . The preceding paragraphs will have given the rationale and context so the aim needs to be succinct and flow directly from the preceding information.
Objectives; Not clear to the reader what objective 3 means. What do you mean by ‘Patient stratification post pharmacy? You should have explained your context and rationale for the change in such a way that this objective would be understandable to the reader. What is the relevance of ‘Patient stratification post pharmacy in your context and within the change?
Page 7. Expected outcomes: Improve the references and expand the benefits of your improvement take a more managerial eye to situation, beyond the mere outcomes of the project and adopt a wider, more managerial perspective. Also, 1.4.1 , your first sentence is a direct quote from that article: please represent this correctly and cite the page number in the citation
Page 8. You are not conducting research: you are implementing a change in practice which is seen as Org Development. Please read the guidelines for your dissertation.
I advise you to look at the Science of Improvement as this is the appropriate approach to take for your Patient Safety & Quality
Improvement (QI) initiative
Author role in organisation and project Use the full title . the first sentence is too long and is poorly written.
Conclusion is poor and needs attention. Briefly tell the reader what has been said and its significance